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3/07/2005

Open debate.

This story was written by me. It's a story of how not to go about getting a cup of coffee.

This version is what the editors at utterpants did to it.

Which do you think is the better? Please let me know. I'm a curious kinda guy.

1 comment:

MissAstridxxx said...

Okay dokey...this is a toughy.
There are bits of the Re done one that I enjoyed, the sugar bit especially as in this crazy 'my ass is the size of a razor blade but yet still too big world' most people, especially women, know that it's different and it did make me laugh. Screaming JUST MAKE THE THING SWEET springs to mind. Didn't like the loss of the word Gimp as it's a favourite of mine and sums up so many people! Maybe a mixed of the two...A Bimbo Gimp!
And the Brad Pitt comment was not to my taste ( any chance it was a woman who changed that as I cant picture a bloke saying that and as it's written from a blokes view clashes and makes no sense??)

I'd like to see scene two when you go back for revenge after your six month ban and ask for the most complicated coffee on the menu ( half cap non whip half fat blah blah blah )plus order a muffing at the end to really f**k the bitch up.
Also did you know that apparently they are trying to stop it being called a white coffee? They want it to be called a coffee with no milk as WHITE COFFEE is racist!!! Seriously??? thought you'd like that bit of knowledge.
ok going to stop now..hope the comments maked sense. Alsocould youlet me know how to get a counter thing on my blog as I have no PC no how but am bloody nosey! SK ;)